For one thing, your CSS seems to include web fonts, but none of the browsers I tested (FFox, Safari, Chrome, all the latest public/stable/official versions) seem to show them. So all text is in Times New Roman.
Edit: Wait, it seems the web fonts are shown in the "scrolltohere" DIV when I enter a twitter username. But the top text is still Times New Roman.
I don't really feel like signing up. Using Safari the text overlaps the input text box and the scroll bars are always showed even though I stretched the browser wide enough to show all elements.
Also your message is confusing. I'm guessing that you want to ask me: "How much can you make tweeting small ads on Twitter?" and then you'll provide the answer on the next page explaining in details how exactly.
I would re-think your strategy here, and would think about having this on the landing page:
* Headline asking "How much can you make tweeting small ads on Twitter?"
* Subtext that explains what I need to do to make money
* Testimonials of people like me showing how much they can earn with their thumbnails
* Simple form asking for my Twitter username and a big button saying something like "Tell me how much I'm worth!"
It sort of sounded like you were going to tell him why the page didn't make you want to sign up, but then you listed a bunch of (mostly) non-visual design considerations. What was it about the page that didn't make you want to sign up? (I'm just curious now.) By the way, the notes you did list were good and he should follow those guidelines.
The look had already been critiqued, and I agreed with what had been said about it.
Aside from the design of the page (and presumably, the site), I judge code quality at almost the same level of importance.
In this case, both are severely sub-standard. I'd never hire this guy, and I'd never use a service he was involved with. Why should I believe he'd be any more careful with my private information than he was with his design or code?
In the end, it's a trust thing. His page does not generate any trust with me.
Man, some of the comments in this thread have a very high harsh to helpful ratio.
- The page could use more structure. The elements seem to be floating around but they're not anchored in a way that feels right to me.
- The page is way too big. Bring it down to about 960px (Rust also covers this in this thread). You should also center the layout.
- The logo should be a little larger, and you might consider centering it. Though if you do center it, make it large enough to fill the space so that it doesn't look awkward.
- Re-style the highlighted text at the top ("Social advertising on Twitter, Done the right way."). Consider placing it under the logo
- Tell us more about how it works or what requirements your service will impose. The more information you can provide the better.
- There is a bit of free-style capitalization going on there which makes it annoying to read.
- The form for submitting your Twitter username could stand to be a little smaller. Maybe make the label ("Type In Your Twitter Username:") stand out a little more. I think it would look better if the calculate button was to the right of the input box.
- The "We pay you per click!" text should be restyled, maybe with some kind of icon or in a box with rounded corners. Right now it just looks like it was an afterthought when really it's an important bit of info.
- Contact, about, and privacy policy are a must have. The less you can tell who made a site, the shadier it looks.
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[ 2.3 ms ] story [ 34.9 ms ] threadAll jokes aside though. What do you think i could do to make it more appealing?
Edit: Wait, it seems the web fonts are shown in the "scrolltohere" DIV when I enter a twitter username. But the top text is still Times New Roman.
Overall it looks amateurish, and doesn't give me any confidence that there's anyone capable of paying much money behind it.
Also your message is confusing. I'm guessing that you want to ask me: "How much can you make tweeting small ads on Twitter?" and then you'll provide the answer on the next page explaining in details how exactly.
I would re-think your strategy here, and would think about having this on the landing page:
* Headline asking "How much can you make tweeting small ads on Twitter?" * Subtext that explains what I need to do to make money * Testimonials of people like me showing how much they can earn with their thumbnails * Simple form asking for my Twitter username and a big button saying something like "Tell me how much I'm worth!"
Just some random thoughts, hope it's helpful :)
Check it out now.
Its just a pre-launch landing pge btw.
My bullshit meters just broke. It makes me question the validity of your product.
1) Content-Type meta needs to be immediately below your opening HEAD tag, or it has no effect
2) Load your style after meta, but before javascript
3) jquery should be loaded before jqueryui - and if you're loading jqueryui from google, why not jquery as well?
4) fixed-width designs should still max out at 960px to 990px wide, not 1160px (most browsers are 1024x768)
5) seriously look at your CSS - a page with this small amount of content should not need 833 lines of CSS
6) in the HTML, you shouldn't need the extra content wrapper around everything. Fixing your CSS should let you remove it
If you need some light help with this, feel free to let me know. I can volunteer a little time over the weekend.
Aside from the design of the page (and presumably, the site), I judge code quality at almost the same level of importance.
In this case, both are severely sub-standard. I'd never hire this guy, and I'd never use a service he was involved with. Why should I believe he'd be any more careful with my private information than he was with his design or code?
In the end, it's a trust thing. His page does not generate any trust with me.
@slater: I didnt even realise the webfonts werent showing up until you told me! Thank you.
@Rust: Yes, its a CSS file im using for the main site when it launches. I havent separated the two. So what you see is the main site's homepage css.
Bad i know. But this was very much a "Quick and Dirty Kind of thing".
- The page could use more structure. The elements seem to be floating around but they're not anchored in a way that feels right to me.
- The page is way too big. Bring it down to about 960px (Rust also covers this in this thread). You should also center the layout.
- The logo should be a little larger, and you might consider centering it. Though if you do center it, make it large enough to fill the space so that it doesn't look awkward.
- Re-style the highlighted text at the top ("Social advertising on Twitter, Done the right way."). Consider placing it under the logo
- Tell us more about how it works or what requirements your service will impose. The more information you can provide the better.
- There is a bit of free-style capitalization going on there which makes it annoying to read.
- The form for submitting your Twitter username could stand to be a little smaller. Maybe make the label ("Type In Your Twitter Username:") stand out a little more. I think it would look better if the calculate button was to the right of the input box.
- The "We pay you per click!" text should be restyled, maybe with some kind of icon or in a box with rounded corners. Right now it just looks like it was an afterthought when really it's an important bit of info.
- Contact, about, and privacy policy are a must have. The less you can tell who made a site, the shadier it looks.
- Where's the little Twitter bird? :P
I hope that helps.