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Ask HN: help with English copywriting?

6 points by earlyriser ↗ HN
English is my second language and I want to be sure that my site is well written.

The site is rrrewind.com and I need:

-TAGLINE "Popular links archive" "Social content archive" ?

-WHAT IS THIS? "Rrrewind saves everyday the most popular stuff from many social sites, this way you don't miss anything."

I'm open to suggestions, not just to corrections. I'm looking for the perfect copy, not just an ok copy (kind of 37signals attention to detail).

Thanks a lot.

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Mz
Edited:

-WHAT IS THIS? "Everyday, Rrrewind saves the most popular stuff from many social sites, so you don't miss a thing."

I don't like "the most popular stuff from many social sites" but I can't think of something better now. Hopefully someone else will come up with a brilliant alternative.

pasbesoin
Actually, off the top of my head, I see "everyday" as an adjective (something that is common, typical, happening/extent every day) while "Every day, ..." would be a temporal clause (denoting "when").

But I'm a little tired -- may be a mental glitch on my part.

Mz
No, I think you are right. My mom is German. I have a bad habit of imposing German grammar on English and don't always notice when I run two words together which shouldn't be (something far more common in German than English). This gets worse when I am tired.

Thanks for noticing.

veb
"Popular links archive" sounds boring, but I'm boring too, so I don't have a suggestion other than "da best links bro".

Uh, "Rrrewind gives you the most popular websites from the best social networking sites - you won't miss anything again."

God, I suck at this.

gstar
If you're looking for perfect copy, can I suggest wordy.com - it's a Seedcamp startup that specialises in copy editing, and we've used them with fantastic results.
gnosis
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Mz
Having looked at the site (http://rrrewind.com/), I am thinking something more like:

Rrrewind: Today's most popular links, from across the social web.

cap4life
Tagline ideas: Update your life. Never miss a thing! Link to your world.

Rrewind let's you save the most popular links from all around the social web.

I'm a professional copywriter, let me know if you need more specific suggestions or work done.

earlyriser
Thanks! Do you have a suggestion to include "popular links" plus the idea of "archive" or "history" or "save".

I would like that the visitors get the complete idea of the site just with the tagline. Something like what Nielse says http://www.useit.com/alertbox/20010722.html

cap4life
I can't think of one off the top of my head without it sounding contrived!
earlyriser
Thanks for your comments.

I just want to point that I cann't afford at this moment hiring a copywriter for this side project. That's why I'm asking HN :) But I admit that with 0 budget I will be going more with an ok copy than with 37signals one.

Mz: your suggestion is good. I'm agree with the "stuff" comment, but sometimes are links, sometimes songs, books, etc. Then "stuff" is the most generic I can think, other alternative is "content" but that is boring.