yeah agreed. right now the tone of your site looks too gimmicky, like you made this JUST so you could land an internship. even if that was your intention, at least hide it better. ideally i think companies are looking for employees who hack on projects for fun, NOT with the explicit goal of padding their resume or impressing anyone in particular.
Thanks for the feedback - I changed the text. I guess I'm not the guy to ask for copywriting :).
I would speculate that the tone might be in part due to cultural background as well - as Wikipedia says, "The Finnish language has no simple equivalent to the English 'please'." http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Finnish_grammar
As for the background story, I did start this project for fun (it was an old hackathon idea) but kicked it into higher gear due to this opportunity coming up.
cool, best of luck to you! perhaps another idea is to explain this background info on your site in some tasteful way. that way, potential employers will see that you're an earnest hacker with a real interest in this stuff (and you might not have a native english speaker's grasp of tone and word usage), as opposed to someone making a one-off gimmick.
For what it's worth, I think "Offer me a place at your startup" is better English, being more clear and less wordy that hajrice's alternative. Rare is the English speaker outside the US or UK who will award you points for speaking in a roundabout manner, and I believe "fit" and "team" are Americanisms.
That's not to say that Silicon Valleyspeak is not the practical choice for this particular situation. But I'd rather not see that become the standard for how native speakers speak.
For anyone living outside The Valley, looking to break in and get a job on the inside, this is how it's done. Show people what you can do - your work is your resume.
Mikito, I'm sure you're sorting through a bunch of potential internships right now. Way to go.
Looking at my inbox, I can only say - today will go down as one of those special days when my life changed. My most sincere thanks to everyone, I will get back to you soon (it's 1:30 in the morning here).
Nice to see this executed in a publicly-accessible way. I built a similar thing a little while ago, but never got around to polishing it up and packaging for consumption.
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I like this better:
"Let me show you how great of a fit I'd be for your team" or something along those lines..
best of luck to you, though!
I would speculate that the tone might be in part due to cultural background as well - as Wikipedia says, "The Finnish language has no simple equivalent to the English 'please'." http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Finnish_grammar
As for the background story, I did start this project for fun (it was an old hackathon idea) but kicked it into higher gear due to this opportunity coming up.
Thanks!
That's not to say that Silicon Valleyspeak is not the practical choice for this particular situation. But I'd rather not see that become the standard for how native speakers speak.
Mikito, I'm sure you're sorting through a bunch of potential internships right now. Way to go.
http://vimeo.com/18833937
https://github.com/burke/jsgithistory