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Question for those in defense contracting: is there a style guide for writing such proposals and does one of its tips include: "Refer to 9/11 as often and as early as you can"?
This paper was apparently written by an Army officer, not a defense contractor (although he may work in acquisitions).

Believe it or not, many people who work in government and the defense industry spend a lot of time thinking about 9/11. Not so outlandish that this would show up in their writing.

Thinking about 9/11 and being concerned about 9/11 is not the same as using it as a rhetorical device four times in the first four paragraphs of the introduction. He's writing to a military audience, not to an audience who is unaware of 9/11's significance and how it may compare to Pearl Harbor
The screenshots in the documentation have IE browser with non-SSL URLs. Really shitty looking apps.
This is not the PRISM/US-984XN. This is decision support system for DHS with same name.
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